self poem???

self poem???

Wednesday, July 28th, 2010 | Clock Topics | admin

I wrote a self-portrait poem but I need help tweeking it up. The first line I have written my first name and the second line period of twilight is the definition of my name. Anyways, I need help changing the first line, any ideas/suggestions? Instead of starting it off with my name I need something more creative.
Also, I need to make it flow a bit more so try to help me make it sound better and edidint help please??
Here is the poem:

____I am......_____________<----- after I am is my name
the period of twilight
At periods I'm weird
At periods I'm a passionate lover
At periods I'm as pure as the color white
At periods I'm as greedy as the color green
At periods I'm like clay
a sticky ductile material
At periods I'm a classic Piscean
At periods I'm like a cuckoo clock
that strikes at random hours
At periods I'm as assertive as an atomic bomb
At periods I know my rights
and at other periods I don't
At periods I'm as zesty as an orange
But I know deep inside my consciousness
no matter what period of the day it is
I am the ultimate period of twilight